Dylan wrote the following sentence for his research paper on giraffes: The wide Savannah is roamed by tall, graceful giraffes.

His teacher told him to revise this sentence so that it is more appropriate for formal writing. Explain to Dylan how to revise the sentence.

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The open savannah is traveled by tall, elegant giraffes.

in the 1800s, locomotives powered by steam made transportation faster and cheaper. the resulting rapid growth of railroads led to the connection of the atlantic and pacific railroad in oklahoma city in 1897.

in the last years of the century, the improvement of steam-based engines the expansion and growth of railroads. this growth increased when the companies started to build and expand, such as the atlantic and pacific railroad, which connected new mexico with california, and missouri with oklahoma. many of these new networks were built in oklahoma, and these changes transportation henceforward.

i believe it is the second one.   if correct plz mark brainliest.