Iwent to my mailbox. i was waiting for something to come in the mail. i opened the mailbox. i looked inside. i saw an envelope. it had my name on it. i took it out. i opened it. i saw a letter addressed to me. it said, “dear ms. clip, we are to tell you that you’ve won our contest. contact us for your prize. sincerely, things for school.” i was excited and went inside to call. rewrite the paragraph using action verbs and power nouns.

can’t really write an essay but think about ur goal and think “how would i do this” sorry if it didn’t

hmm, sadly there is no dialogue. there is no place in the story where he is talking to anyone. it's more of just describing what he eats and where he sleeps. you have to become anne frank, give details of where you are, what other folks look like, how the environment is. have a little bit of dialogue tell of what people are specifically saying. anne frank talked about her entire household including the people, the objects, the lighting, the food they ate, and even the smell in the air. there has to be more to your diary entries, the whole story in its current state is only about peter van daan, the food, the sounds, and where he sleeps. also he seems to be writing only once a year yet more than that happened from day to day. for a friend, i can you write it out, if you want.