do you thing this is a good essay if not tell me what i should change and also i put the rubrick so if i followed it can you tell me and if i didn't tell me why

What grade is this for? Because depending on the grade, then I can see what needs to be fixed.

First of all you need to change the title (if that tile is not mandatory) to why college should be free and not why should college be free

second there is a typo in your first paragraph and some wording issues

i would change it with An immense amount of students could not and cannot afford to pay tuition for their education

make sure to include in all three of your body paragraphs information supporting you main ideas make sure to tell where you got the information and make sure to quote, for instance in your 3rd body paragraph you could find an article on average cost a student spends on textbooks and stuff like that be carful while doing this and QUOTE AND TELL WHERE YOU GOT IT FROM SO YOU DO NOT PLAGERIZE

good job on your transitions

and so far you are doing good on your essay

once you fix this stuff up it will match the rubric

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