Is this inappropriate language,”good evening, everyone. for coming out to sit on hard, uncomfortable stadium concrete on an unseasonably warm evening and wearing clothes and shoes you can’t wait to get home to get get ou of.” if so, how can i write it in formal?

I don't exactly understand the question, but this is more "formal" (If it is for a presentation or dialogue)

Good evening everyone! Thank you for taking the time to come sit on this hard, uncomftorable stadium concrete during such an unreasonably warm evening. I can understand the desire you all must have to go home, undress, and relax.

eloy ..from united states and i am a boy