How does this sound? Ever wondered what it's like for the mill workers each day? Well, they aren’t that good. The daily life of a worker is to wake up, eat little food, get to work on time, stand for about 15 hours, head to the dorms, eat poorly again, then sleep while being crammed in between 2 other people. Workers have to do gruesome tasks that can cause lots of health problems later on, such as arthritis and Postural orthostatic tachycardia syndrome. They were also not fed properly which can lead to…
• osteoporosis and bone fractures.
• infertility.
• developmental problems.
• a weakened immune system.
• malnutrition.
• increased risk of surgical complications.
• anemia.
• And chronic fatigue.
Some of these diseases can be treated, but some can’t. In conclusion, workers are treated very poorly. A lot of people have died while working there, and a lot are sick. These workers need to be treated better, they are human beings like the rest of us.

I'd say you did a very fine job! You have a nice balance of description and facts.

The sentence "Well, they aren't that good" needs work, and could be changed, especially the phrase "aren't that good" seems quite passive.

You've used "a lot" repetitively, consider changing to "many" in the conclusion sentence.

Other than that its wonderful! Fix up tiny things and you should be very proud to turn that in.

the mandate of heaven or tian ming (chinese: 天命; pinyin: tiānmìng; wade–giles: t'ien-ming) is a chinese political and religious doctrine used since ancient times to justify the rule of the king or emperor of china. according to this belief, heaven (天, tian)—which embodies the natural order and will of the universe—bestows the mandate on a just ruler of china, the "son of heaven" of the "celestial empire". if a ruler was overthrown, this was interpreted as an indication that the ruler was unworthy, and had lost the mandate. it was also a common belief among citizens that natural disasters such as famine and flood were signs of heaven's displeasure with the ruler, so there would often be revolts following major disasters as citizens saw these as signs that the mandate of heaven had been withdrawn.[1]

a brief flow chart describing the dynastic cycles in imperial china on claiming to withdrawing the mandate of heaven

the mandate of heaven does not require a legitimate ruler to be of noble birth, depending instead on the just and able performance of the rulers and their heirs. dynasties such as the han and ming dynasties were founded by men of common origins. the concept is in some ways similar to the european concept of the divine right of kings; however, unlike the european concept, it does not in theory confer an unconditional right to rule, despite this being exactly the case in practicality. the mandate would in theory be a preoccupation in a ruler's lifetime, when he would hold onto the mandate and live according to heavens. intrinsic to the concept of the mandate of heaven was the right of rebellion against an unjust ruler. chinese historians interpreted a successful revolt as evidence that heaven had withdrawn its mandate from the ruler. throughout chinese history, times of poverty and natural disasters were often taken as signs that heaven considered the incumbent ruler unjust and thus in need of replacement. the mandate of heaven was often invoked by philosophers and scholars in china as a way to curtail the abuse of power by the ruler. while each dynasty was not the same, they each had a lineage that passed on the prospective ruler by order of generational descent or their priority of birth. many emperors during the imperial times would optimize to have many sons who could be candidates to fill the position after the current ruler has died. in addition heaven was thought to be of how a ruler's works and performance was, which reflected upon how favorable they would be to heaven.

question as stated in comment

why did the chinese require the portuguese to pay for goods in gold and silver when trading?

choices

portuguese goods were less valuable than chinese goods.

the chinese already had a surplus of portuguese goods.

the imperial government wanted to stockpile gold and silver.

portuguese and chinese currencies were not exchangeable.

this a history q n in ancient time, theres no money exchange. so ans is portuguese and chinese currencies were not exchangeable.