In no fewer than three sentences, critique the following paragraph. explain where it could be improved. then, in your own words, rewrite the paragraph to make its writing stronger. make sure you include a hook, supporting evidence, and a topic sentence. use correct spelling and grammar. learning to swim is one of my happiest childhood memories. the beach offers more than a place to develop strong swimming skills. there are many things to do at the beach. it is unfortunate that so many people spend every day indoors. more people should take time to visit their local beaches. i am glad i learned to swim at the beach.   

For a topic sentence, or the beginning sentence that signifies the main idea of the paragraph, you could focus on the fact that there are a variety of things to do at the beach (perhaps the 3rd sentence). To create a hook, or an eye-catching sentence, you can use the childhood memory of learning to swim, but perhaps in more detail. In other words, recreate the scene rather than just saying it was a happy memory (i.e. I'm five years old and am amazed by how weightless I feel in the water). Once you create the hook and topic sentence, you can talk about other activities at the beach as your supporting evidence.

the answer is somber

answer: fog is black

explanation:

cause idek what ur talking about and you should learn it ur self