The officers of artillery, in smart blue uniforms faced with black velvet and gold, were solidly banked across one end of the audience hall, with flashing new swords and their gilt-braided hats stiffly held under their arms. from the door of that chamber, around the gallery, down the state staircase, across the grandiose inner court of the palace, and out through the imposing gates to the street, stood a double line of soldiers, with their rifles at present arms. four regimental bands grouped in one wedged in the crowd. the people of the capital were massed in solid thousands on the plaza de armas before the palace. source: reed, john. "villa accepts a medal." insurgent mexico. new york: d. appleton and company, 1914. google books. web. 16 may 2011. what is the point of view of the excerpt?

hmm, sadly there is no dialogue. there is no place in the story where he is talking to anyone. it's more of just describing what he eats and where he sleeps. you have to become anne frank, give details of where you are, what other folks look like, how the environment is. have a little bit of dialogue tell of what people are specifically saying. anne frank talked about her entire household including the people, the objects, the lighting, the food they ate, and even the smell in the air. there has to be more to your diary entries, the whole story in its current state is only about peter van daan, the food, the sounds, and where he sleeps. also he seems to be writing only once a year yet more than that happened from day to day. for a friend, i can you write it out, if you want.

that is based on your opinion not an answer someone can just give you unless you want to lie on your opinion. no offense wasn't trying to be rude. tip: use words like instead of don't put do not and you get what i mean