Will rate,,and mark brainliest night, by eliezer wiesel, is a memoir about wiesel’s, who was a young boy at the time, life in concentration camps during the holocaust. an occurring theme throughout the book is elie losing his faith in god because of the experiences he has from the nazi concentration camp. he begins the book his religion acting as his identity but then as the book goes on he slowly loses his belief in god. my introduction paragraph sounds a little awkward how can i fix it?

An introductory paragraph must and must not contain these things:

Must-
1. Hook/Grabber - Interesting fact, rhetorical question (not recommended), statistic, or just anything (in this case) relating to what your essay is going to talk about that may make the reader more interested. I suggest that you try and make this a little more interesting, such as something relating to Elie and the holocaust to keep the reader interested.
2. Overview of Support - Write what you will further explain in the next paragraphs so that the reader actually knows what they're getting into. It is vital for any article or essay because it helped ease into the writing without any confusion. You should also include shortened reasoning of why your statement is correct/to justify your claim.

Must Not-
1. Very long, dragged out sentences - This will obviously bore the reader. Long and dragged out/descriptive intros will make the reader disinterested and possibly just outright explain what the entire essay is about, which is also a bad sign because it could be considered repetition (which, yes, consistency is key, but seeing the same thing over and over constantly may annoy the reader). You also want to avoid doing this because it takes up more time than it needs to -- remember this is just an introduction!
2. Anything off-topic or unrelated to what your essay/article is about - This means not talking about yourself (especially if it is an informative essay) or talking about your family and the  Holocaust (as an example, but not accurate), (etc.) when that is not the main focus of the essay.

This is about all I can think of for now, if you have any further questions, please PM me. Hope I helped and good luck!