I have to write a summary for English using the guidelines from chapter 2 of: THEY SAY/I SAY. Can someone check this and tell me what I need to add or change

The career that i have* decided to present this year is photography. photographers use both aritficial and natural lighting*use a transition sentence when going into the 2nd paragraphso.. photographer? *in order for me to be a photographer* scratch "accomplish this ranking" then say, i must first.. and continue on the sentence instead of different use various*