In no fewer than three sentences, critique the following paragraph. Explain where it could be improved. Then, in your own words, rewrite the paragraph to make its writing
stronger. Make sure you include a hook, supporting evidence, and a topic sentence. Use
correct spelling and grammar.

Playing in the snow is one of my happiest childhood memories. The winter offers more than
time for kids to have fun. There are many things to do in the snow. It is unfortunate that so
many people find the wintertime annoying. More people should step outside to enjoy the
snow. I am glad I grew up where it snows. (5 points)

research question: do the predicted benefits of genetic enhancements outweigh the possible negative consequences of this technology?  

what information do i need to research in order to answer this question?  

-predicted benefits of genetic enhancements

-negative consequences of genetic enhancements

-existing, if any, consequences of the new technology

-possible consequences if the technology is perfected

what sources will have the information?

-scientific research documents or news articles summarizing research

-articles in science and medical journals, magazines, and electronic databases

-books

-experts at genetics: geneticists, scientists, professors

here you go have a nice day

lol idk i really dk dang im dumb xd