I need help with my quick write essay I need to write about LGBT discrimination 3 introductions 3 body paragraphs and 3-4 or 5 conclusions

Which can writers improve their writing

Read the paragraph. we heard music coming from the auditorium so we crept up to the door in peaked in. i couldn’t believe my eyes! a group of dancers were on stage in the most beautiful costumes i have ever seen. i looked at mabel and she looked back at me with the same expression. our eyes were wide with joy and wonder. which point of view does the narrator use

What does the narrator do in this passage to increase suspense and encourage the reader to continue reading