Read the sentence. Which revision best uses dialogue to improve the
I told them how surprised and excited I was to have my
sentence?
painting selected, especially since I'd felt so incompetent
at the beginning and knew the competition was SO
"Yup, it was a big surprise," I told them. "I'm excited
ruthless.
that my painting was selected! Especially since | felt
so incompetent at the beginning and the competition
was so ruthless."
"Honestly, I was surprised," I told them truthfully. "The
competition was ruthless, and I felt incompetent at the
beginning. It's really exciting to have my painting
selected!"
"I'm in! My painting is in! feel a fist pump and a little
dance coming on," I said, grinning. thought about
how I felt so incompetent at the beginning because of
the ruthless competition.
"Did you hear?" asked them. "My painting got
selected! Exciting, right?" I smiled. "Especially given
that I felt so incompetent at the beainning mk