Read the paragraph from a personal narrative. It may have seemed like an ordinary day to everyone
else, but to me, it couldn't have been further from it 2
Today was my first day working as a waitress at Pete's
Pizza Haven, and I could not have been more excited.
3
In fact, I was so excited that I rushed to get ready
much faster than I typically do. ^ "I'm ready to go!"
shouted, bouncing down the stairs and flying into the
kitchen, where my mom was making breakfast 5 "
have so much to learn and don't want to be late,"
declared for emphasis. 6 My mom just grinned and
placed a steaming plate of eggs before me.
Which best revises sentence 3 to make it more
precise?
o I had so many grand plans in my head for the
money I would soon be making, and I hurried to get
ready as quickly as I could
O With visions of trendy clothes and piles of spending
money dancing pirouettes in my brain, I took a
shower and got dressed in record time,
As I rushed to shower and be ready on time,
thought about all the different things I could do with
the money I would soon be making.
Because I was so nervous, I could not stop thinking
about my new job even as I rushed to shower and
get ready faster than I ever had