Immediately before the rumble begins, Pony says that he doesn't hate the Socs anymore. Why, then, does he proceed to attack the Socs and not just defend himself?

What is the problem with the following sentence: cameron, who has an extreme and unreasonable suspicion of other people and their motives, suffers from paranoia which is a psychological disorder characterized by delusions of persecution or grandeur, was absolutely sure that someone was following him even though he was absolutely alone and hadn't seen a car for miles and miles.

What about the sentence structure in this passage build suspense

What is the best way to revise sentence number (12)