Can someone edit this short essay... make it sound smart, please :) [1] Kicking a ball in a net and scoring, is not as important as saving lives. Soccer to me would be considered overrated. Many fans have problems when it comes to cheering for their team. It causes many conflicts, that can’t be solved by a simple resolution like shaking hands. Sports, especially soccer is not worth a heart attack or increase of blood pressure. Those scoring in a soccer game earn more money than a doctors salary who saves lives of human beings every second of the time in the world. [2] Based on my experience, watching soccer games or being a fan of any type of sport shouldn’t cause your blood pressure to decrease or increase. Conflicts rise between a team against another team, and instructors against other instructors. Many don’t keep in mind that we don’t live on earth eternally, so theres no need to waste time thinking about a lost game. [3] “Overrated” is often used to diminish concepts, places, and even roles. I believe that soccer does not deserve the prestige it is given today. I know mostly about famous soccer players who can score goals two times in a row, than I know about doctors who scored an important goal by saving the lives of people, who were on the border of loosing their lives.

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1)Kicking and scoring a ball in a net is not as critical as saving lives. To me, soccer will be deemed overrated. When it comes to cheering for their team, many fans have issues. It triggers many disputes, such as shaking hands, which can not be resolved by a simple solution. Sports are not worth a heart attack or an increase in blood pressure, particularly soccer. Those who score in a soccer game gain more money than the wages of a doctor who saves human lives every second of the world's time. [2] Watching soccer games or becoming a fan of any form of sport does not cause the blood pressure to decrease or rise, based on my experience. Conflicts are increasing between a team and another team, and Against other instructors, instructors. Some don't take into account that we don't live eternally on earth, so there's no need to waste time worrying about a lost game. [3] To minimize terms, locations, and even positions, "overrated" is also used. I agree that the reputation it is provided today is not earned by soccer. Most of the time, I know of famous soccer players who can score goals twice in a row than I know of doctors who have scored a big goal by saving the lives of people who have been on the verge of losing their lives.

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irving effectively uses emotional responses to create suspense in the story.irving’s tone creates expectations for the reader, which in turn create suspense.irving’s suspense would have been more effective with more vivid details.irving’s story is not suspenseful

answer:

a. "there, said he, there is something for you."

explanation:

"said he" should not have been part of what is in the dialogue.