Rewrite the following paragraph, presenting the information in any order you choose. Use sentence variety and subordination, as discussed
in the chapter introduction, to make the paragraph more interesting
Classroom Activity Using Effective Sentences
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When Billy saw the crime, he was in a grocery store buying hot
dog buns for the barbecue he had scheduled for the next weekend.
The crime was a burglary, and the criminal was someone you
would never expect to see commit a crime. His basketball shoes
squeaked as he ran away, and he looked no more than 15 years old
with a fresh, eager face that was the picture of innocence. Billy
watched the youth steal a purse right off a woman's shoulder, and
the bright sun reflected off the thief's forehead as he ran away,
although the weather was quite chilly and had been for a week. The
police officer who caught the thief tripped him and handcuffed him
as Billy paid for the hot dog buns, got in his car, and drove away.