ASAP please paraphrase the 4 lines will mark brainliest if correct

The original piece:

The outlook wasn't brilliant for the Mudville nine that day:

The score stood four to two, with but one inning more to play,

And then when Cooney died at first, Barrows did the same,

A pall-like silence fell upon the patrons of the game

My paraphrased piece:

The viewpoint wasn't brilliant for the Mudville nine that day: The score stood four to two, with but one inning more to play, And at that point when Cooney passed on at to begin with, Pushcarts did the same, A pall-like hush fell upon the benefactors of the diversion

or

The point of view wasn't brilliant for the Mudville nine that day: the score was four to two, with just one more inning to go, and at that point when Cooney moved on to begin with, Pushcarts did the same, A pale-like hush descended on the diversion benefactors.

i tried-

the primary theme of "elegy written in a country churchyard" is a reflection about the significance of the lives of a group of modest people buried in a rural church cemetery. elegies focus on the death of an individual or group of people, and they generally have a melancholy tone. hope this you all.