Read the rough draft of a student's conclusion to an argumentative editorial
Which best revises sentence 6 to create a more
appropriate and respectful tone?
A be
(1) Year-round schooling would help student
achievement. (2) Not so much information would have
to be crammed into nine months. (3) Furthermore, the
elimination of long breaks, particularly summer break,
would significantly reduce "learning loss" and the
additional time wasted at the beginning of each
academic year to reteach previously learned material
(4) It is clear that year-round schooling helps students
learn and retain more. (5) The United States is not the
only country to experiment with a year-round school
schedule. (6) Although many still claim that evidence
about year-round school and its link to higher
achievement is inconclusive, these people need to
open their eyes and see that students in these schools
consistently score higher on certain assessments than
students who attend schools with traditional nine-
Although many still claim that evidence about year-
round school and its link to higher achievement is
inconclusive, studies consistently reveal that year-
round students score higher on certain
assessments than those students who attend
schools with traditional nine-month calendars.
O Although many still claim that evidence about year-
round school and its link to higher achievement is
inconclusive, this theory is wrong because students
in year-round schools consistently score higher on
certain assessments than those students who
attend schools with traditional nine-month
calendars
Although many still claim that evidence about year-
round school and its link to higher achievement i