Directions: In the following paragraph, the writer has used only simple sentences. First, read the paragraph carefully out loud. Then, rewrite the paragraph below. See if you can reorganize and restructure the sentences in a better way, using prepositional phrases and transitions. My Hero

My Gran is my hero. She is brilliant. She loves to read. She is easily bored. As a young girl, she struggled a great deal. She left home at 21. She moved to the West Coast. There, she chose to educate herself. She chose studies over security. She lived in poverty for many years. She eventually got a job teaching at university. She married late in life. She had a beautiful family. She never stopped learning. She died with a burning curiosity about life.

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My Gran is a brilliant hero, and I look up to her. She gets easily bored at times and she loves to read. When she was a young girl, she struggled to get a proper education. She then, decided to move towards the West Coast when she was 21. There she sought out a decent education and chose studies over security. When she had the time, she would teach at university. She married later on in life. She never gave up her passion of learning and later on died with a burning curiosity about life.