Please help i have posted this question 3 times' and no one ahs answered it please 30 points please help I really don't understand can you please revise my paragraph and make it have no passive voice and change the Syntax (sentence structure). In the beginning, it all began with Ralph Baer in 1967 in Nashua, NH. In 1966, while working for Sanders Associates Inc., engineer Ralph Baer began to investigate how to play games on TV. And as a result of his investigations Brown Box was created. According to the G-Phoria Legend Award, “Baer is considered "the Father of Video Games due to his many contributions to games and helping to spark the video game industry in the latter half of the 20th century”. Little did we know this great invention would be in everyone's life today.

4/5 Coherence
5/15 Syntax (sentence structure) - highlight the changes made to the syntax
5/10 Voice (no passive voice) - highlight the changes made to the voice 5/15 Reflection Paragraph --Describe the specific revisions you made regarding SYNTAX and VOICE to demonstrate your understanding of those concepts. Explain how your changes improved the paragraph.

The quality is good.

No passive voice.

In the beginning, it all began with Ralph Baer in 1967 in Nashua, NH. In 1966, while working for Sanders Associates Inc., engineer Ralph Baer began to investigate how to play games on TV. (add examples of investigations, don't add too much cuz it is gonna get too wordy)And as a result of his investigations Brown Box was created. According to the G-Phoria Legend Award, “Baer is considered "the Father of Video Games due to his many contributions to games and helping to spark the video game industry in the latter half of the 20th century”. Little did we know this great invention would be in everyone's life today.

I would say you should tell the reader some of the investigations he made, possibly some examples.

just add on too that

explanation:

each year on march 8, international women’s day is celebrated around the globe. it’s an important opportunity to shine a spotlight on women’s involvement, contributions, and accomplishments on a range of issues from domestic violence to the role of women in the c-suite. the theme this year is “be bold for change”― a dictum that those who know me personally will acknowledge has pretty much been my mantra throughout my career on wall street, in media and most recently, in philanthropy.the empowerment of girls as leaders, who can be emboldened today to become even stronger leaders tomorrow, is an increasingly recognized imperative in our world, and it couldn’t be closer to my heart

gregor could have been bullying her