Which would affect the pace of a story? A).Connotative diction
B).Short, choppy sentences
C).Shifting point of view
D).Use of first person narrator

B (short choppy sentences)

Explanation:

When a sentence is short, instead of being able to add small bits of detail and diolge, you have to make separate paragraphs and sentences to explain. The story would not be as compelling or interesting and would drag on.

faulty parallelism is a grammar construction where there is no balance in the parts of a sentence they have a similar meaning but the grammar structure is not equivalent.

the correct version of this faulty parallelism in the sentence is:

jefferson wrote the declaration of independence, and he was the nation's third president.

the problem with the first version is that the sentence:

"jefferson was both the writer of the declaration of independence"

presents jefferson as both a subject and an agent for the verb "write" because if he was "the writer" then the declaration of independence was written by him, besides that fact, the sentence presents a dependent clause.

while the second sentence:

he was the nation's third president.

presents a basic subject+verb+object structure

so, to give a proper balance to the structure, or better said, to give a parallel structure, we must write a basic s+v+o structure in both sentences:

jefferson wrote the declaration of independence, and he was the nation third president.

second one- because has facts and not opinion