Please help!
Where's your evidence/quote?
what are you persuading your audience to do/not to do? Right now, this sounds like an informative essay, not a persuasive/argumentative essay.
Where is the thesis statement? What are you asking your audience to do/not to do in order to solve the problem of animal abuse?
Seems like you're trying to fit your entire essay into your intro. Your intro should just have a background in your topic.
What does this have to do with the rest of your essay? Feels off-topic.

What is emphasized in william carlos williams’s “landscape with the fall of icarus” but not in pieter brueghel’s landscape with the fall of icarus? what conclusions can you draw about the similarities and differences between the themes of the work? english 9 - 3.3.9 practice - apex learning

Some one drawing water and my theater placed my hand under the spout. as the cool stream gushed over one hand she spelled into the other the word water , first slowly , then rapidly . i stood still ,my whole attention fixed upon the motions of her fingers . suddenly i felt misty consciousness as of soothing forgotten --a thrill of returning thought and somehow the mystery of language was revealed to me this passage from the stoyof my life is an wxample of which element of plotclimax action

Match each poem with the subculture or counterculture from which it came. hip–hop counterculture feminist counterculture beat generation a. "pay attention, here's the thick of the plot/i pulled up to the corner at the end of my block/and that's when i saw this beautiful girly–girl walkin'/i picked up my car phone to perpetrate like i was talkin'" (jazzy jeff and the fresh prince) b. "for no church told me/no guru holds me/no advice/just stone/of new york" (jack kerouac) c. "you fit into me/ like a hook into an eye/a fish hook/an open eye" (margaret atwood)