How do the narrators actions develop the story’s theme

Which revision of the sentence most effectively incorporates the literary term characterized?

What does water came out from a rock mean in this poem and why is it compared to the radio waltz? time was away and somewhere else. the waiter did not come, the clock forgot them and the radio waltz came out like water from a rock: time was away and somewhere else.

How is time represented in “persistence of memory” by salvador dali? what effect does dali achieve? can writers use similar techniques in written works? how would writers achieve this with words?