Excerpt from Experimental Art
Hank Jaskulka
I've got another world of which I like to gladly dream.
Some say that it's abnormal; my affections are exclusive.
In science, they say, emotions are something quite elusive.
The author makes the claim that "In science, they say, emotions are something quite elusive. This claim could be better supported if
the author added at least five or six more stanzas about his dreams
the author gave more examples of successful works of art he'd completed
the author specified who the 'they' is and quoted these critics directly
the author described in detail a few of the science experiments he'd done.