Can someone help me add more detail to my essay. I've have 3 full paragraphs and need like 2 more. I will Mark Brainliest to whoever can be honest with there response. ( I POSTED A PICTURE OF WHAT I HAVE WRITTEN SO FAR). ( I'm writing an essay about " Jack" in the story " Lord of the Flies". Explain how the character creates or influences one of the themes in the novel. ( I Will Mark Brainliest). Need help ASAP

Your essay is good.

Explanation:

Your transition words are good. You do repeat his a lot in the writing. Sometimes it is good to repeat Jack's name instead of "his" multiple times. In a essay or any writing, you want to try to not repeat anything in it so some feedback is what I always need personally. Your conclusion sentence is good, but in the conclusions sentence you always want to kind of repeat what you said in your introduction statement, and its the same thing with saying "he," make sure you say his name. But otherwise, your essay is good! Hope this helps you!

i don't see any questions on your profile, currently, but i'd be happy to try and with any problems that you have, so long as i understand the problem myself.

the first step is to convey the appropriate emotions.