Part 2 – developing body paragraphs
directions: use your planning in part 1 to write your two body paragraphs. use complete sentences, proper grammar and punctuation, and transitions to develop your body paragraphs. each body paragraph should have a transition at the beginning of the topic sentence and at least two within each paragraph

here is what i said in part one (if you can fix anything do)

body paragraph 1
● topic sentence: taylor uses personal experiences to encourage her readers to take action

● example from text to support topic sentence: "
last week, as my best friend areliss and i headed to class, a group of college protesters blocked our path. their signs read "go home" and "illegals leave.""

● explanation of how the example serves purpose: the example shows that she has experienced what she is writing about.

● example from text to support topic sentence: "my dream is that daca will be reinstated. my dream is that areliss will be invited to stay in the country she was born in and live out her dreams in the country she loves."

● explanation of how the example serves purpose: it shows she has passion behind what she says and makes the readers want to support her dream and take action.
body paragraph 2
● topic sentence: taylor also uses metaphors and similes to make the situation be more surreal.

● example from text to support topic sentence: "their words were bullets to areliss's heart"

● explanation of how the example serves purpose: this shows her anger for how people treated immigrants.

● example from text to support topic sentence: "pamphlets like tattered flags"

● explanation of how the example serves purpose: she is using this metaphor to show that the pamphlets people were waving is like a torn flag a glimpse of its once held glory.

in the short story the slip-over sweater by jesse stuart, the main character and narrator shan is friends with grace, an intelligent girl he has known since childhood and with whom he used to be in love.

at the beginning of the story, shan believes he’s no longer in love with grace, but loves jo-anne instead. in order to buy a slip-over sweater and have jo-anne wear it so that the other students would know she loved him too, shan takes a loan at the bank.

while jo-anne is wearing shan’s sweater, his friend grace starts to wear another popular boy’s one, roy’s sweater. because of that, the other students begin to pay attention to grace and compliment her perseverance and effort. they admire her for walking 5 miles to school every day, despite the weather, and still getting the best grades. shan, who knows all of that for a fact, says, as the narrator, ‘and i knew she had the durability and the toughness of a storm-battered mountain oak.’ he compares his friend’s strength – not only physical, but also of character – to an oak tree, whose wood is known for being sturdy.

as the story goes on, shan changes his behavior out of concern for the debt he has to pay at the bank. his new girlfriend jo-anne never asks him what is wrong nor offers any sort of . instead, she breaks up with shan for not being as fun as she thought he was supposed to be. grace, however, not only asks about shan’s problem, but him make the money he needs. shan can’t but notice how different the girls are and what a wonderful person grace is.   even though he used to find jo-anne prettier at the beginning of the story, he now says, ‘grace was as beautiful as our mountain was in april, prettier than a blossom of wild phlox or a mountain daisy.’ his comparing grace to a mountain or something that exists on a mountain (such as a mountain oak or daisy) certainly has important meaning since shan loves the mountain and everything about it and he knows the mountain thoroughly. shan also loves and knows grace as completely as he does the mountain.