Can you review my homework to see if anything needs fixing up?

how well do the animals work together? is everything fair?
most of the animals are working well together. mollie, for example, “[is] not good at getting up in the mornings, and [has] a way of leaving work early” (47) and on the other side of the spectrum, the pigs are working hard and taking extra because of it while boxer, who was “always at the spot where the work was hardest” (46), got the same as the people who did what they were told and no more. this makes things a bit less fair than they should because boxer should be rewarded in some way for his volunteering and mollie should work more.

Most of the animals are working well together. Mollie, for example, “[is] not good at getting up in the mornings, and [has] a way of leaving work early” (47) and on the other side of the spectrum, the pigs are working hard and taking extra because of it while Boxer, who was “always at the spot where the work was hardest” (46), got the same as the people who did what they were told and no more. This makes things a bit less fair than they should because Boxer should be rewarded in some way for his volunteering and Mollie should work more.

Explanation:

The sentence I have underlines is a run on sentence. Here's how I would write it instead:

Mollie, for example, “[is] not good at getting up in the mornings, and [has] a way of leaving work early” (47), whereas the pigs are working hard and taking extra because of Mollie's tardiness. Boxer, who was “always at the spot where the work was hardest” (46), volunteered more than others and went above and beyond others.

1. read the following excerpt from franklin d. roosevelt's "fireside chat 19":

on the other side of the picture, we must learn also to know that guerilla warfare against the germans in, let us say serbia or norway, us; that a successful russian offensive against the germans us; and that british successes on land or sea in any part of the world strengthen our hands.

remember always that germany and italy, regardless of any formal declaration of war, consider themselves at war with the united states at this moment just as much as they consider themselves at war with britain or russia. and germany puts all the other republics of the americas into the same category of enemies. the people of our sister republics of this hemisphere can be honored by that fact.  

the true goal we seek is far above and beyond the ugly field of battle. when we resort to force, as now we must, we are determined that this force shall be directed toward ultimate good as well as against immediate evil. we americans are not destroyers — we are builders.

analyze the effectiveness of this excerpt. how does it function within the speech as a whole? how does the structure of the excerpt to convey the speech's purpose and key points? support your argument with evidence from the speech. (10 points)

that's a lot of reading foo

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