(1) being a member of the columbia middle school soccer team is a positive and fun experience. (2) i joined the soccer team two years ago, and i have been a member ever since. (3) i have learned a lot. (4) before i started on the team, i enjoyed doing projects by myself and did not appreciate others' opinions. (5) after participating on the team, however, i have learned to value my teammates. (6) being on the team has also me to get much needed physical activity. (7) staying physically active me to better pay attention in class and have enough energy for other activities. (8) the columbia middle school soccer team is quite successful. (9) it won two out of the three past state championships. (10) although winning two championships was rewarding, i believe making friends and being physically fit are the two most important benefits of playing on the team. (11) i encourage those interested in the team to attend an upcoming practice to see if they would like to join.
a student decided to revise the paragraph by combining sentences 8 and 9 this way:
the columbia middle school soccer team—which has won two out of the three past state championships—is quite successful.
did the student combine the sentences appropriately for this paragraph?
a) yes, because shorter sentences confuse readers.
b) no, because the new sentence does not make sense.
c) yes, because the new sentence shows the link between the ideas.
d) no, because having more sentences makes the paragraph look better.