What changes should be made to the above statement, located within a resume, to make it a more effective and powerful sounding qualification?

just took the test;

argument: "it's time to wage a war against britain to secure american freedom."

claims: "america has tried every peaceful method available for seperating from england" & "the americans' petitions to the king have been turned away by him."

the sample answer on e2020

conflicting values are demonstrated between two different groups in animal farm. first, the farm animals value hard work. this is shown by them working late and working long hours at the request of the pigs. napoleon and the pigs, however, sleep late daily. furthermore, the animals value equality. this differs from the value of napoleon and the other pigs. instead of equality, they value only gaining power and maintaining their own privilege, which is demonstrated by their taking extra milk and sleeping in beds.

is this multiple choice?