Read this conclusion of an argumentative essay.

our national parks are special. most people know that, but there are a few who still have not gotten the memo. those individuals need to understand that there are a lot of benefits we get by taking care of those places. they need to get out of their houses and take a few vacations in those parks. catch sight of some deer or some wolves or some bears. go camping and pick some wildflowers. pretty soon they will see how much better nature is than their television set.

this conclusion could be more successful if the writer revised by

adding a new claim and generating good reasons.

adding more reasons and credible sources.

adding more transitions and creating a more respectful tone.

adding more evidence and a few more transitions.