Can i have some critique on my poem? our focus is on concrete detail and rhythm/meter. you so much. the poem doesn't represent my views- its for an ela assignment on the theme on how discrimination has a bad effect.

1. read the following excerpt from franklin d. roosevelt's "fireside chat 19":

on the other side of the picture, we must learn also to know that guerilla warfare against the germans in, let us say serbia or norway, us; that a successful russian offensive against the germans us; and that british successes on land or sea in any part of the world strengthen our hands.

remember always that germany and italy, regardless of any formal declaration of war, consider themselves at war with the united states at this moment just as much as they consider themselves at war with britain or russia. and germany puts all the other republics of the americas into the same category of enemies. the people of our sister republics of this hemisphere can be honored by that fact.  

the true goal we seek is far above and beyond the ugly field of battle. when we resort to force, as now we must, we are determined that this force shall be directed toward ultimate good as well as against immediate evil. we americans are not destroyers — we are builders.

analyze the effectiveness of this excerpt. how does it function within the speech as a whole? how does the structure of the excerpt to convey the speech's purpose and key points? support your argument with evidence from the speech. (10 points)

subject: why anyone can be a genius.

occasion: moving forward in life.

audience: average person

purpose: to push you further in life

speaker: many famous geniuses.

here is the poem:

here is thy, and here is thee, genius is for what he can be.

poem is a matter of rhyme, but like ben frank said, life is a matter of time.

we have great inventors such as thomas edison, who said, "genius is one percent inspiration and 99% perspiration." no, no perspiration as what comes from your skeleton.

we have great minds, from places of all kinds, such as yu kaw la chi tie, (now im switching languages because yu kaw was japanese.)

てちハラスイヒイス, てちラスイヒイス

てちのちみスイヒイス.

you are a genius, well not yet, but you are capable, and that is a bet.