Which version of the sentence uses words that create the most painful feeling? the splinter in my hand was rather painful when the nurse pressed on it. the shard in my hand was rather painful when the nurse pressed on it. the sliver in my hand was rather painful when the nurse pressed on it. the fragment in my hand was rather painful when the nurse pressed on it.

“way of writing” should be replaced with “writing style"

“idea” should be replaced with “purpose.”

maybe   “people from a long time ago” should be replaced with “elizabethans.”

you have so far written an informative essay (if you haven't then you might want to do that. look back at the lesson for guidance) answer the question but is it the best conclusion it can be? does it properly summarize the main subtopics of your essay? does it state in one or two sentences the “so what” of your topic. if your topic was abraham lincoln, your essay shouldn’t be just about abraham lincoln. it should answer, “so what about abraham lincoln? ”

revise your conclusion

hope this you!