If someone can me with this english paper i would appreciate it very it's about music and the topic is: should there be music education in all high schools? (why or why not? ) , it has to be a paragraph not a sentence.. also in third person point of so can someone ? also will mark as !

Music is a very big part of many peoples lives, and the option to study music should be available in all high schools. Music is a creative outlet that many people need in their daily lives. Music can give students something to focus on, that allows them to express thoughts and emotions that they normally couldn't.  Music can help with speaking skills, timing. and often gives them an opportunity to be part of a group of peers with similar interests.