Kyra has decided to do her speech on trends in vampire fiction. Her two main points are as follows: (1) Many vampire series have introduced werewolves into the mix. (2) The Twilight series introduced Jacob, a werewolf, into the series. What is the problem with these statements as Kyra’s main points?

They are not distinct.

Explanation:

When making a statement that is made up different main points, it is important to seperate them into distinct entities that can be easily identify by the reader.

This eases understanding of the reader and makes the piece more appealing.

In this scenario two main points are as follows: (1) Many vampire series have introduced werewolves into the mix. (2) The Twilight series introduced Jacob, a werewolf, into the series.

This is actually a single point broken into 2. Many vampire series like Twilight series introduced werewolves into the mix.