Read the two script descriptions below and note down what is wrong or right with them from a visual storytelling perspective: Sample 1

John and Glen sit at a table at a restaurant. A biker walks past their table as Glen drops his napkin and bends down to pick it up. The biker trips over him, the biker gets angry, and then he starts a fight.

Sample 2

Two young men sit at a table in a restaurant. A man wearing black leather, bandana, a motorcycle helmet, and a long beard walks past as one of the young men bends down to retrieve a dropped napkin. The man with the beard trips over the young man and nearly falls. Catching himself, he turns and glares at the young man, and then starts swinging punches.

Sample 2 describes the characters visually. The writer details the character’s emotions and gestures. In Sample 1, the scene lacks a vivid visual description, which makes it difficult for the reader to understand or visualize the scene.

Sample 2 clearly mentions what the characters are wearing and how they look. Sample 1 only mentions that two men are sitting at a restaurant. There is no additional information that can help a reader visualize the characters or setting while reading the description.

Sample 1 gives a vague description of how the character gets angry and fights with the biker, but Sample 2 describes in detail how the characters first glares at the biker before hurling punches at him. Sample 2 gives many visual cues, which can help professionals such as the cameraman and costume designer.

Explanation:

well seeing i am an artist and i actually did a self portrait; i will describe how i painted it.   i used acrylic on a stretch canvas about 4 feet wide by 6 feet tall. i painted myself smiling in a soft pink long dress, white tile floor sitting on a white couch with a table behind and a vase of gorgeous flowers.   i also had a round white hat with a soft pink ribbon through it laying on the floor and on the table behind me was a lit candle. i kept it simple but soft and romantic.